Barnyard Bawl-out 2

The original version of this work was done for the "Skribble" contest, in which the work had to start with a given selection of lines.
I liked the idea I came up with, and wanted to redo it without the constraint of the given lines. I'd be interested in any feedback about this version versus the first version.
Again, this is dedicated to all the current and former teen punk rockers out there.
Cheers, Dave